Saturday, July 16, 2011

Short and to the Point

Saturday Centus...and 25 words...oh my...5, 25, 50, 100...I can do this, I can do anything. I may not be getting any younger, but I am getting better...although my creative vision often trumps my abilities to put vision to paper. Somehow though, as usually happens, the vision came to me in an instant...question is can I translate the feel of the moment in so few words? Perhaps with a little ESP working, some of you might feel it, see it, wrap your heads around it...I hope so.

"Anything else hon?"
"No, thanks."

She returned with the check...and an unexpected note...
I'm off at 11...meet me out front...

What the heck, I'm not getting any younger...
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18 comments:

  1. LynnJuly 16, 2011 at 5:30 AM

    Woo Hoo!:@)

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  2. UnknownJuly 16, 2011 at 5:40 AM

    hahahahahhaa ..... it's not what you said but what you didn't ..... hahaaaha. Good one, Jeff.

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  3. NonnaJuly 16, 2011 at 8:38 AM

    Clever and excellent job Jeff...no worries...ESP worked perfectly !!!

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  4. cj SchlottmanJuly 16, 2011 at 9:09 AM

    jc,

    You naughty boy! This is a perfect take on this prompt. I expected them to be married and her going off on an errand for him, but your twist brought me back down to earth.

    I love it.

    Namaste..........cj

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  5. BookieJuly 16, 2011 at 11:17 AM

    Both thinking in same vein today...older folks want some fun too!! :)

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  6. jfb57July 16, 2011 at 11:38 AM

    What a cheeky piece - you rouge! Fab!

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  7. AmesJuly 16, 2011 at 1:53 PM

    I hope your going to give her a nice tip!~Ames

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  8. Linda Bob Grifins Korbetis HallJuly 16, 2011 at 4:54 PM

    playful lines,
    bless your weekend,
    enjoyed your take.

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  9. Dazee DreamerJuly 16, 2011 at 8:58 PM

    hahahaha. great job. I loved it.

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  10. Rawknrobyn.blogspot.comJuly 16, 2011 at 9:02 PM

    Woohoo. Seems a big "tip" awaits. ;0>
    Great take, Jeff.
    xoRobyn

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  11. Susan AndersonJuly 17, 2011 at 1:09 AM

    Never too late, right?

    =)

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  12. Vinay Leo R.July 17, 2011 at 10:07 AM

    LOL :D Very interesting! Good one!

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  13. DaydreamerJuly 17, 2011 at 10:30 AM

    LOL Very clever centus!

    Soul Speak

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  14. Bargain Decorating with LaurieJuly 17, 2011 at 6:48 PM

    LOL! I liked this. I thought you made your point very well with so few words. laurie

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  15. JudieJuly 20, 2011 at 1:05 PM

    You wish! Hahahahaha!!!

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  16. UnknownJuly 21, 2011 at 1:04 AM

    Dream on, Jeff!
    Nice text!

    Thank you for your comment about John Tell's aching back. I sketched him first as a youngish man; but this prompt has aged him! We'll see what he will be in a longer story.
    Best wishes,
    Anna

    For the benefit of other readers:
    Books are heavy-Anna's SC wk 63

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  17. TinaJuly 21, 2011 at 1:15 AM

    uw very nice ... what will happen when the clock strikes eleven?

    My Centus

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  18. JennyJuly 23, 2011 at 4:12 PM

    What a deliciously naughty use of this prompt!

    I feel the intrique and tension!

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