Saturday, May 14, 2011

A Thread That Runs, Part 2

It was a bright, sunny day, and all was just right as Nell rocked in harmony with the universe. Just as she was a about to take the glass of lemonade to her lips, she noticed a beautiful, golden thread leading away from the porch. She set her glass down, and followed the thread, perfectly visible, sparkling in the noonday sun. It led through the trees and across the grassy meadow. In the distance she saw what appeared to be a large, golden needle laying on the ground, the golden thread running through the eye. Just as she was about to crawl through the eye, she awoke...to the sound of Baby Jean crying...and her mother singing softly, "hush little baby, don't you cry...", soft and sweet as she had sung to her...
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12 comments:

  1. NonnaMay 14, 2011 at 6:18 AM

    Beautifully done !

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  2. cj SchlottmanMay 14, 2011 at 7:26 AM

    Beautiful, Jeff, and so very visual. You have a way of making word pictures that jump off the page. The sentiment is well developed and very tender. Another good one!

    Namaste..........cj

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  3. AmandaMay 14, 2011 at 8:56 AM

    It has a nice Alice in Wonderland touch to it!

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  4. Susan AndersonMay 14, 2011 at 9:50 AM

    What an exquisite little story. I loved the image of a golden thread and needle, as well as climbing through the eye of it. A touch of magic.

    =)

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  5. UnknownMay 14, 2011 at 9:52 AM

    Love the imagery in this write, well done!

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  6. AmesMay 14, 2011 at 1:13 PM

    A dream! Very good Jeff! Seamless. I was there with her. You can make this story go on. Why don't you??~Ames

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  7. JudieMay 14, 2011 at 4:46 PM

    "Oh, had I a golden thread, and a needle so fine..."

    This is what I have come to expect from you, my gentle friend.

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  8. Rawknrobyn.blogspot.comMay 14, 2011 at 9:58 PM

    I always enjoy your writing, Jeff. You have a magical way with words. I especially like that she was about to "crawl through the eye."
    xoRobyn

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  9. PorkyMay 15, 2011 at 2:56 AM

    Wonderfully magical it is, and the break was intriguing too. There's real potential there. Good experiment!

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  10. UnknownMay 15, 2011 at 7:01 AM

    O.K., Mudbug .... you made me smile to myself. I was actually visually tracing that thread across our yards. NICE!!

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  11. TinaMay 17, 2011 at 3:50 AM

    how facinating. sounds like a really cool fairytale story. part 3? ;-) ... thanks for visiting my news room blog too by the way jeff

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  12. JennyMay 29, 2011 at 1:11 PM

    Is there a part three? I am enchanted by the old fashioned feel to this little fairy-talesque story. I love the idea of the golden thread and needle.

    More, please.

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