and time once again,
for Saturday Centus
with my 'Centurion' friends.
With a prompt we are lead
to write creatively,
with Miss Jenny, our teacher,
guiding us lovingly.
Using only 100 words, or less,
each one of us trying
to do our best.
I urge you to go
and check out SC,
where you will find prose,
and some poetry.
Without further ado,
I'll give what I've got,
hot off the presses,
terribly hot.
Room In My Mind
I pace the floor
of this room
in my mind...
A small space
i've created
that no one can find.
Create it indeed
with no windows or door...
Foolish planning I think
as I pace the floor.
What will I do
if I decide
this is not best?
Being in this room
in my mind
where I thought
i might rest.
I try to cry out
I scream, I shout.
Yet there is no one
to hear me,
no one about.
If I had a hammer
i'd bust my way out.
With no windows, no door,
no tools to free me...
i'm resigned to this plight,
this absurd destiny.
All of a sudden
a sound from above!
The bird has returned,
my mental 'white dove'...
has brought renewed hope,
and, quite possibly,
love...
What a lovely ending, I loved it :o)
ReplyDeleteI think, without a doubt, I have been in this room!
ReplyDeleteJeff, I just read your comment on my Centus...I think you have a point about the guy sentiments. I am going to have to think about that, and it would be good writing practice for POV to force a gender change.
ReplyDeleteThis was very well done. I think everyone at one time or another feels like they are in the room with no windows or doors. I love the concept of the white dove coming. Great job.
ReplyDeleteWonderful imagery!
ReplyDeleteREally great pictures painted here! Thank you!
ReplyDeleteI live in this room most of the time. I've got a white dove or two who help me out when I've been there too long.
ReplyDeleteExquisitely written.
This is beautiful. I especially like the reference to a 'mental white dove.'
ReplyDeleteHave a great weekend.
xoRobyn
I was right with you, all the way through.
ReplyDeleteReally nice.
=)
Sounds like one of my nightmares. Oh how our mind can torture us! You are very good at writting poems!~Ames
ReplyDeletewow I loved that what imagination you have
ReplyDeleteWonderfully imagined. I loved the hopeful ending.
ReplyDeleteLovely poem. Here your hammer is a tool that could help you escape from this room. Nice ending with the dove and love.
ReplyDeleteBest wishes,
Anna
Anna's SC Week 23
this was just precious. A plethora of emotion packed in here. Just loved it
ReplyDeleteIs there ANYTHING you don't do well??
ReplyDeleteThis is such a creative take on the starter. Lovely poem with a hopeful ending!
ReplyDeleteTeresa
Totally busted by this!
ReplyDeletethat hammer
oh I love the imagery there - thank you for sharing!
ReplyDeleteThis was wonderful Jeff. What a beautiful and different use of the prompt. And I love the last stanza. Kat
ReplyDeleteThe Mind is the biggest challenge. Enjoyed the peek into your mind.
ReplyDeletewow, jeff!
ReplyDeletethis beautiful poem speaks directly to my heart. your images are so sturdy, they give the piece great weight.
bravo..........cj
PS: i admit to an anti-guy flavor to my post, but i've written a lot more good guy stuff than negative! i happen to adore guys. it's about the creativity and good writing, not the sentiment.
Hey, scootch over Jeff. You're crowding me in this tiny little room.
ReplyDeleteLove the imagery in this. Love the blast of the prompt words like a cry to battle.
The intro was fabulous, too, but then you went into even more amazing poetry.
I feel like you've given me a gift here.
This was wonderful and really spoke to things with me right now!
Hugs and thank you!